I'm going out on a limb here, but I would respectfully suggest that you find a good teacher and ask for feedback from that individual in person. On the internet you have no idea of the qualifications or experience of anyone who might give their opinion. This applies whether you are looking for an "atta boy" response or a real critique.
Good potential, can't decide if I like the lack of tonguing. The high end notes are kinda sketchy and some of the bends seem to be backwards. A good instructor would go a long way to getting closer to where I think you want to be. But then, who am I to say. Good luck.